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""Then It must be wrong""
  by chocolaetreat
  - This Poem is a response to the poem Something's Not Right by MzSpoon aka "The Temptres...


Something's not right ... then it must be wrong
I realize something is missing from my home!

It can't be you... cause you're laying right beside me..
I feel your manhood up against my backside... so what could it be?

Something's not right... then it must be wrong
When you put your hands on me...I would rather you leave me the hell alone!

See your touch is so cold and I can feel that there is no love in it
I lay with you ever night like I'm happy and content...

But... something's not right.... then it must be wrong...
The fact as I lay beside you ... another man is where my thoughts roam.

See My heart is somewhere else.... and I can't control that
That's why instead of cuddling you at night ...I quickly turn my back...

See something's not right ....But I can't seem to accept being wrong...

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Date Submitted: Nov 04, 2008 (10:42 AM)
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  LyricallyDamag...
11/15/08 (09:00 PM) 
that's so true.. If somethings not right, then it must be wrong.. what else can it possibly be? but this was nice, the the worst feeling someone could have.. having someone there but wanting to be some place else.

  Syndel
11/10/08 (05:07 AM) 
wow yes you can lay in that which does not satisfy you but your the one being short changed if its not right and feels wrong then it is but I can def relate to this write sorry so late reading

  MzSpoon is bac...
11/04/08 (05:59 PM) 
I like this response...girl you did the thing!

  angeleyes1
11/04/08 (04:47 PM) 
very good diva treat lmao you always know how to lay it down keep flowing with your words much love

  Luvlee
11/04/08 (11:26 AM) 
wow...i mean it sucks but at the same time at least you've come to that realization and arent all lost and confused!!! I liked this a very nice response its like i jumped into another house with their own personal story!!! great write Diva!

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