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"The One: Rejected"
  by D.O.X.
  - This Poem is a response to the poem The One: Rejected by Level Aquanaut


She was very adimate
when she told me
"I don't want your love!"
thus making all I had to give...
completely worthless
the productline of my heart
though manufactered
with the highest quality
has to be
shutdown & put out of business
for I have apparently overstocked
with depreciated goods
her past failures
when she invested
very heavily in love
and got no returns
have left her at a loss
so she now despises it
mines makes me
repulsive to her
now the one she once embraced so affectionately...
is now alienated
she claims
she no longer has the energy
and refuses to allow me
to refuel her
the love she once
sought in a man
she now seeks
in her daughter
Now
while i have always
had an appreciation
for the relationship
between a mother & her child...
I find it as
an inadequate substitute
for that of a man & woman
deep inside...
she does too
but her built up bitterness
wont allow her enjoy
that in which she seeked
a majority of her life
what was once
her driving force
has now become
a repelant
causing her to
flee at its very sight
so here
I am...
The One: Rejected
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Date Submitted: Jul 05, 2008 (07:14 AM)
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  LyricallyDelic...
08/25/08 (10:21 AM) 
The flow and line arrangment made the sentiment easy to follow. I've been a women whose made this decision. To saccrifice the non guarenteed and fleeting love of a man for the love that given (to my children) can only yeild positive results. loving your babies means a definate return on investment. It's nice to view this from the other side of the spectrum.

  timesticking
07/25/08 (10:06 AM) 
ACTUALLY I UNDERSTAND WERE THE GIRL WAS COMING FROM AFTER BEING HURT ENOUGH TIMES YOU BEGIN TO QUESTION EVERY PIECE OF LOVE YOU RECIEVE

  BSavvy
07/25/08 (09:47 AM) 
You penned this great.... It sucks when you are really putting your self out there and really want to love that person but they shut you down then you feel rejected. Then on the flip side I can understand on so many levels where she is coming from bc when you been put through so much and heard it over and over again I just want to love you it gets tired bc the results are always the same no matter who the partner is so often times we have to put up that wall so high but if you really love her y...
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  juicy2007
07/25/08 (09:06 AM) 
THIS IS AMAZUNG....AND HEARTFELT

  TRU-IN-DEED
07/25/08 (01:35 AM) 
Damn...this was a friggin dope response my brudda! This is the way a response should be done kiddies so take notes! lmao but nah i felt this to the core and I'm with dp bout the last line....way 2 close it out fam nicely done. - T.I.D.

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