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"Obsidian Myth"
  by Blakfiya


My Heart Will Go On [1998] - Celine Dion
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above me
was you
and no night shown
as my eyes struggled to focus,
feeling strength fleeing,
to focus
squeezing your hand
as sirens wailed
and I inhaled metallic breath,
and now its up to this,
just this wish...

to focus on your face

to hear the words pouring
in a deluge from your lips
mingling with salt drips
from your eyes.

focus

on your face becoming so distant
~~~~~~~~~~~~whoa~~~~~~~~~~~~
lost time for an instant,
why are you shaking me?
and acting crazy

focus

outside noises compete with words,
its a struggle to make my voice heard
Can you hear me?
why are you
taking steps
back?

What's this? Who is that?
Touching me

please, baby, FOCUS

why is the night
playing with the day
I can't see you anymore
...please stay
I apologize if I've hurt you
or made you feel I didn't need you
questioned your manhood,
or at times didn't believe you

I love you

so loud that my soul is deaf
So much I've no breath left to say the words
but please hear me…
I love you!

so focus on that fact
if a memory of me
should ever make you
forget that

Obsidian Myth

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Date Submitted: Aug 20, 2008 (06:13 PM)
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  11th Wonduh
08/23/08 (02:50 PM) 
very moving peace, truly exemplifying the strength of love and how powerful it can be even in the last stages. good piece

  .Jaded Noble.
08/20/08 (11:54 PM) 
word uttered in the final moments of life are ones of great worth.. someone told me that a long time and ago and I always thought about what I would say if my time came...... this piece.. played out like cinema... very storyline driven and emotion envoking..... and captured me beautifully..... *shed tear* nice bravo

  ...Da RiDdLeR ...
08/20/08 (11:09 PM) 
understood the point the love is always there always existing beyond light dark life death low or heights.. but grrr i cant stand that celine song its worn out..lol..

  One
08/20/08 (10:39 PM) 
pay it proper dues...allocate attention

  One
08/20/08 (10:38 PM) 
I think this is focusing on the fact that death can't really take away...and to enjoy what you have while you have it...

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