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"Not Just A Greeting"
  by D1Uadore305


Bermuda jeans
Baby blue polo
Jordan's clean
Walking solo
She was the epitome of God's beautiful crafths
He had the apperance of the American Dream
On a back street they crossed paths
Innocent greeting is how it seemed
She gave a friendly smile
He gave a smirk
She kept walking with a smile about a mile
He nodded and grabbed her with a twirk
"OUCH, PLEASE, STOP, KEEP MY PURSE, JUST LET ME GO..."
As if mesmorized by her beauty he heard not a thing
Transforming into a nemfo
And was only having the birds sing
She kicks only to be pinned on the ground
And punched in the face
He still heard no sound
She crys, praying to just wake up in another place
He thrusted in her breaking her teenage innocence
Her screaming over shadowed by his rugged moans
With blood, the bottom of her baby blue polo is drenched
Now matching her blue and red Jordan's
Eyes burning from so many tears she closed her eyes
Praying "Help Lord, speak to me...let me get away"
She blanked out and died
Never again to hear her crys.



~Dominique N.D.~
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Date Submitted: Feb 24, 2008 (06:21 PM)
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  619
09/13/08 (05:09 PM) 
this is really deep, like i could visualize everything, it was really good.

  Jody
04/14/08 (05:14 PM) 
wow, the depth in this piece... this is once again a brilliant poem. The way you opened it... it was serene and bliss and then of course what happened is nothing blissfull or peacefull... you gave perspective in this piece from both he and she and the difference in them... wow, just a really deep piece...

  spud124
03/01/08 (05:09 PM) 
GODDAMN BABYGIRL WHAT YOU BE THINKING BOUT

  unforgivenange...
02/27/08 (07:54 AM) 
wow this is deep and powerful. A sad truth to be told. You portrayed this story well. I felt the range of emotions through and through. Keep writing this was awesome work.. Thanks for sharing your work with me peace :)

  mckool
02/26/08 (07:07 PM) 
dam this poem is good and no one should ever go through that good writing keep it up ten stars

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