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"No Rhythm"
  by Afroditee
  - This Poem is a response to the poem Private dancer by One


he had garbed himself in a woolen suit
as we merged our sheepish circumstances,
wolfen grin guised by garish dentures,
as we danced...


now, there he lied :
immortalized through squandered poetic output,
synonymously decapitated and educated
via the meanderings of a scarred poet’s outlook:
emaciation resulting from his dishonest obesity,
using poetry as a means of emotional therapy,
privately, seeking to ultimately take responsibility
for actions that i can only bring back to…

…me.


he

satiating his vapid ego
by the non-subtle nuances of my words’ flow
wanting to bend me over backwards,
“spread ass eagle”
with a view to inject me with his hypodermic needle;
needling me to subdue me to his will,
and his narcissistic, perverse poetic thrill,
possibly poisoning my essence with his
arsenic loaded quill,
whilst i, continually feed him verse geared towards
the formation of a non-existent character,
refusing to don a victim’s stance,
throughout the mechanisms of his poisoned inhabitance
of my vagina’s loyal circumstances;

i, circumcising his broken bic,
with the sharpened edge of my poetic wit,
becoming the magical puppeteer,

programming pinocchio to conform
with the requirements of a conscience’s norm,
pulling strings, affecting the impotent thrusting
of his wooden hips,
whilst sinister laughter erupts from betwixt my
once fellatio spouting lips…

eventually, i will come to grips.

****
'Fro
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Date Submitted: Aug 05, 2008 (09:24 PM)
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  SlimCutta
11/10/08 (01:03 PM) 
Umm...word killa and poetry thrilla...thats your new name..like wow..i dont know how you arent famous for your writes..these are very great works of words and thoughts..

  LadyMay16
08/07/08 (10:42 AM) 
This was just the response i was hoping to enjoy...I love how your mind rotates and creates wity lines that only a female and conjure up and serve. Def a fav in my book

  TRU-IN-DEED
08/06/08 (02:16 AM) 
Damn fro...you really flexed some slick vocab in this piece but hey that is nothin new. This was indeed an excellent response piece. I may have to come back and read it again in order to really take it all in but even just on the surface, this is dope. - T.I.D.

  alastor
08/06/08 (01:35 AM) 
Definitely deserving of a showcase. The massive deluge of visions this poured into my mind. Regal tiger ferocious with the massive differentiations of vocab. I pride myself on that & you certainly delivered. Beautiful imagery & wordplay. Inspiring; everything poetry should be. Much love. 10 starz raving!

  H.H. Holloway
08/06/08 (01:14 AM) 
This was a dichotomy of delicacy and debauchery in the most creatively complex lines that I've read thus far--WOW--Pardon the simplistic expression, but yeah--that's pretty much all I can say after reading your piece--it drips with wit--the wordplay was scientifically outrageous--and the tone flickered back and forth from voyeur to sniper--overall you demolished the stage and set the mic on fire--10!!!

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