Nickname:Red Curtain$ Country:United States City:new york State:NY Gender:Female Age:25 Member Since:Jul 31, 2007 Last Login:Jan 06, 2009 Poems Submitted:8 Average Ranking: Poem Comments:84 Poem Views:543 Member Comments:20
Commented on the poem "Just Wait" on 01/06/09 at 12:16 AM
i definetely like this poem. i could learn from this. i havent let go of my past relationship and it hurts. im glad you put it into poetry. i like when you said " if you do not it will be like a movie "rewind"
the drape to the window of my mind" that line really had me wanting to keep reading further into the poem. captivated by a concept. your word usage pulls me in even more.it like a corner that im eager to see whats around so i keep walking and walking to find the end. so in the end of your poem i was satisfied that i let my eyes walk the corners of poem to find the deeper meaning
" i see the pen in your mind scribbling out a metaphoric despription" that line is real deep, i can visuablize what your saying. this is a well written poem and i especially like the line "dressed up in mocha skin..the one who is sent to me to inspire me. its like the person is heaven sent.
this was well written and i was captured by the line" you're my ebony covergirl dont jet on me this soon hopefully in time this has to pass dont like the vibe so i have to ask can we make this old new?? i love how you incorporated the magazines into those lines
wow thie poem was real. i see you got your nas on with the mathematics. i love the ending" they said by the timeim 18, i'm be bombard by the 9, something with the 8&9 i broke down the curse like mj with the 45 age 23,hopefully, i be alive."
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January 06, 2008 at 10:10 PM
HELLO TO EVERYONE ON GS POETRY. ALOT OF PEOPLE ARE COMING ON MY PAGE TO READ BUT ARE NOT LEAVING COMMENTS. I ASK THAT YOU LEAVE COMMENTS AND RATE MY WORK. THANX