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"aquarian soulflower"
  by 11th Wonduh





(said you wanted a grown ass man II)

((settanta rima))

cool breeze, tranquil walk thru his (garden)
in search of love i/ february

jasmine blossoms, sweet from eden's gardens
aquarian florists, picked you f/ me

exclusive instructions, irrigate w/ care & love
exposure to dehydrating elements (she wilts)

disregarded words, now jasmine petals, have fallen
blackouts, lack of sunlight w/ no water, love has wilted




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Date Submitted: Sep 17, 2008 (11:34 AM)
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comment icon  POEM RESPONSES (1)
Date: 09/17/08 (11:38 AM)
Author: Group: Creativity Lives
Poem Title: aquarian soulflower

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  David Wilson
09/28/08 (07:17 AM) 
you really did your thing with this piece. the imagery was remarkable and captivating. this is one of the best scribes i've read in a good long while. and this line just carries this piece to a completely different level, "jasmine blossoms, sweet from eden's gardens aquarian florists, picked you f/ me". Great scribe once again, keep the pen flowing and the paper filling. Peace David

  LiquidFire
09/26/08 (11:56 PM) 
I wonder, even when we come with instructions how you could still get it wrong. I liked this simply because the vision that came along with the poem. Took me to a tranquil place at first, then delivered me to a moment of sadness in my own mind. Bittersweet. But the power that you had in your words to do that makes the whole poem lovely.

  Beautiful Soul
09/21/08 (10:40 AM) 
{Deeply sighs}...Brotha, you have just touched me in ways unknown to man..first off, I the Aquarian who often refers to herself as a flower, frequently wilted... this was a personal attack on my senses in the best way ever..the words you used brought me to life as well as this poem...loved it, loved it... and .. loved it!!!!

  XPERIENCE
09/20/08 (07:51 PM) 
"jasmine blossoms, sweet from eden's gardens aquarian florists, picked you f/ me exclusive instructions, irrigate w/ care & love exposure to dehydrating elements (she wilts) " i loved that part...yes we do need some tlc sometime..loved this one

  iva
09/20/08 (11:46 AM) 
blessed write here .nature and love always make a good poem

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