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"...and he said"
  by imperfect beauTy
  - This Poem is a response to the poem ...and she said by imperfect beauTy


Compromise,
a two way street

And

Apologetically,
he said his ''i'm sorrys'',
on repeat

Yet

.\ upon deaf ears, they fell /.

For, she
Was shouting over he,
her angst and grief

Oblivious to the efforts of a tired him
and his unheard words, offering relief

Attempts at synchronized progression

Left lingering questions

As chords of discontentment,
strangled that weakened esophagus of his

Trampling over his emotions, shoulders,
He lay, chest pressed against concrete,
weighted by her feet
As she became absorbed, epitomizing the definition of what selfish is


...and she said
'' where were u, when u broke the heart of ME..?''

...and he said
'' can't you see?
Its not about you...



...what about WE?"

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Moving Mountains - Usher

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Date Submitted: Jul 24, 2008 (01:44 PM)
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comment icon  POEM RESPONSES (1)
Date: 07/24/08 (01:50 PM)
Author: imperfect beauTy
Poem Title: ...and TOGETHER, THE...

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comment icon  COMMENTS (17)
  HiS Cr4zY Be4u...
09/09/08 (09:33 PM) 
"WE" iS THE HARDEST PART OF ANY RELATiONSHiP. VERY COMPARABLE TO MOViNG MOUNTAiNS. THE LAST QUOTES ARE VERY NESCESSARY... FUNNY HOW YOU HAVE TO HEAR SOMEONE SAY iT TO SEE..THAT iTS ABOUT "WE"!!

  Chocolate City
08/16/08 (04:48 PM) 
wooooow... u are a great writter.. i love the ending.. this has a beautiful message behid it.. very good job

  LiquidFire
08/16/08 (11:44 AM) 
That was impacting to say the least, it shows the flip side to broken relationships. I think we as women sometimes become blind to the men and their griefs because we feel more relevant, and I feel sometimes that has to do more with the fact that they aren't expressive as we are and we percieve them to be strong and uncaring, unmoved by the situation. This just depicted the frustration they go through. Ib love how you did this!

  GOD_OF_WAR_7
08/03/08 (02:55 AM) 
What an excellent beautifully delivered masterpiece. Loved every word queen............

  LadyMay16
07/28/08 (01:20 PM) 
Yes yes yes...there is no"I" in team when it comes to love.

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